A poem

Brock · 13th September 2003, 10:10 AM

Since i hardly got any feedback on daedalian's board i will post it here to get hopefully some more feed back!!!

Slowly Cutting, Quickly Bleeding

For anyone

I go out of the sun to avoid the shade,
I closed my eyes,this picture will never fade,
I am burning some memories for something to do,
Even the smoke it reminds me of you,
Life flows by like a river,
The thought of you makes me shiver,
View this poem as a another wasted memory,
I take it as a blissful reverie,
I light a candle to remember the past,
Then I blow it out because it didnt last,
Another night and i am lying awake,
Thinking over a beautiful mistake,
Another day another night you might be mine,
Another dream another time everything is fine,
I see a shadow lurking there,
I feel sick, I feel despair,
The streetlight smiles with a radiant gleam,
I got wet but I didnt go through the stream,
In the field i wander blindly and find a knife,
It shines so bright, if it talked i'd make it my wife,
It fits perfectly in my pocket,
I tred carefully not to knock it,
I drink some wine as it were sin,
I lose some friends yet they win,
I make a phone call to someone who might care
It rings and rings but no-one is there
I look in my cracked mirror to see my hairline receeding
But I dont care.........
Because I am slowly cutting but quickly bleeding

Let me know what you think??

Take care everyone

Anyone who doesnt know me feel free to add me to MSN Or Yahoo!

Brock

Mr.Skiba · 17th September 2003, 11:01 PM

i fucking liked that man! I'm an emo kid from the main boards and never ventured here before but It pleases me to find this....that was fucking beautiful man

kj · 17th September 2003, 11:09 PM

excellent work.

I should maybe put a link to this poetry board on the main forums somewhere, its kinda out of place. we need more of this kind of thing on the site

keep it up.

Brock · 21st September 2003, 08:55 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by kj

excellent work.

I should maybe put a link to this poetry board on the main forums somewhere, its kinda out of place. we need more of this kind of thing on the site

keep it up.

I would like that, coz i aint a rap fan, i more of a death/black metal fan and posting it here was last resort.

~smack · 4th October 2003, 06:02 PM

yeh GJ man, very melancholie (sp?). calmed me down somewhat reading that.

~smack.

13th September 2003, 10:10 AM	#1 (permalink)
Brock Registered User Join Date: Sep 2003 Location: Kirkintilloch Posts: 90	A poem Since i hardly got any feedback on daedalian's board i will post it here to get hopefully some more feed back!!! Slowly Cutting, Quickly Bleeding For anyone I go out of the sun to avoid the shade, I closed my eyes,this picture will never fade, I am burning some memories for something to do, Even the smoke it reminds me of you, Life flows by like a river, The thought of you makes me shiver, View this poem as a another wasted memory, I take it as a blissful reverie, I light a candle to remember the past, Then I blow it out because it didnt last, Another night and i am lying awake, Thinking over a beautiful mistake, Another day another night you might be mine, Another dream another time everything is fine, I see a shadow lurking there, I feel sick, I feel despair, The streetlight smiles with a radiant gleam, I got wet but I didnt go through the stream, In the field i wander blindly and find a knife, It shines so bright, if it talked i'd make it my wife, It fits perfectly in my pocket, I tred carefully not to knock it, I drink some wine as it were sin, I lose some friends yet they win, I make a phone call to someone who might care It rings and rings but no-one is there I look in my cracked mirror to see my hairline receeding But I dont care......... Because I am slowly cutting but quickly bleeding Let me know what you think?? Take care everyone Anyone who doesnt know me feel free to add me to MSN Or Yahoo! Brock

17th September 2003, 11:09 PM	#3 (permalink)
kj gimp Join Date: Aug 2001 Location: Scotland Posts: 13,958 Band: A band of merry men	excellent work. I should maybe put a link to this poetry board on the main forums somewhere, its kinda out of place. we need more of this kind of thing on the site keep it up. __________________ This community cannot survive without your continued support. galleries \|\| links directory \|\| profiles \|\| wiki

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17th September 2003, 11:01 PM	#2 (permalink)
Mr.Skiba Registered User Join Date: Aug 2003 Location: Dundee, Scotland Posts: 236	i fucking liked that man! I'm an emo kid from the main boards and never ventured here before but It pleases me to find this....that was fucking beautiful man

4th October 2003, 06:02 PM	#5 (permalink)
~smack Excuse me, who are you? Join Date: Feb 2003 Location: Dundee Posts: 3,139	yeh GJ man, very melancholie (sp?). calmed me down somewhat reading that. ~smack.